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    dots Submission Name: Be My Edendots
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    Author: all2rest
    Elite Ratio:    3.75 - 30/40/34
    Words: 167
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       Just another love poem


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    dotsBe My Edendots
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    Let your presence overcome my senses
    Let your voice surround me on all sides
    Your eyes pierce my soul and I feel as if God himself has judged me

    Let me rest in your warmth
    Let me roam freely in your beauty
    Open your heart and share the fertile ground within

    Let me walk beside your secret thoughts
    Let me feel the glory of your love
    I want to see it bloom under the light of your eyes

    Let me cool in the waters of your joy-filled tears
    Let me wander through the silk of your long, pretty hair.
    I want to know the touch of your soft, perfect skin

    Let me tend your soul with love and care
    Let me be the Adam to your Eve
    Together we can make it something new

    Let me taste the fruit of your lips
    Let me swallow it down and defy all reason
    If you wanted, you could be my Eden




    Submitted on 2008-09-16 06:46:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Sweet..where do i sign up? haha

    Your ability to put love into simpler terms by simply compairing details with natural events... Its beautiful!
    The simple things in life are hard to ignore ; )
    | Posted on 2009-01-31 00:00:00 | by SilentWriter420 | [ Reply to This ]


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