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    dots Submission Name: Marines' Hymndots
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    Author: strokes
    ASL Info:    20/m/ny
    Elite Ratio:    4.25 - 20/26/26
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       Maybe, from what history has showed us, just maybe war is not the answer.


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    dotsMarines' Hymndots
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    Black Walls and White Crosses
    Tears wept for our losses
    Saratoga, Surabachi, Iwo Jima
    Men we'll never see again

    Folded Flags
    21 Gun Salute
    The fate for many
    who chose not to shoot

    Sculpted Marble
    Wilted Roses
    Faded Photos
    Just memories to us

    Empty boots
    haunting nightmares
    a survivor's affair

    Violins and bagpipes
    justify blood for Stars and Stripes?

    My Brother, your Dad
    a generation of Nations'
    Grandpas are dead

    In the name of God
    often we kill Men
    Didn't Jesus save?
    That was then?

    And this is now
    and this is how
    anger sounds

    Muted trumpet
    Black Veil
    discreet lace
    heroes welcome
    spit in your face

    Ancient virtue
    Holy Grace
    Politicians saving face

    Skies Burning
    People gone
    Shadows left
    on the ground

    Fires give
    and fires take
    fires burn
    men to no trace

    Sunset n' sunrise
    inching closer to our demise

    open hands
    open hearts
    failed before
    starts anew
    a youthful view
    a worldly vow
    embrace the moment
    the time is now.




    Submitted on 2008-09-16 07:17:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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