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    dots Submission Name: mister thomas & miss cecileydots
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    Author: augustcranes
    ASL Info:    16 - Female - Underwood
    Elite Ratio:    6.3 - 23/8/6
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 138
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       one day mister thomas and miss ceciley will die.


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    1.
    miss ceciley in the park with a blank slate
    and raindrops streaming down her face

    a mere puppet on strings
    of conscious thoughts fly away to the
    east blown wind

    "going south," she says - not sure if it's hell
    but she's thinking only time can tell



    2.
    mister thomas frets with his broker's glasses
    wiping away invisible dust motes
    watching miss ceciley run down the street
    in only her apron and bare feet

    a judas stain upon her veins -
    not a religious slur, merely a Shakespearean verse rehersed
    as if heaven's umbrellas will cease to exist
    like our grinding bones




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      This is definitely an interesting piece. I want to know what you really think about this other than "one day, mister thomas and miss ceciley will die." It gives it a depressing feel. Are the two characters taken from real people in your life...or is it all the inspiration, the embodiment of heartbreak and rational logic?

    The end...not entirely sure what it means. "The grinding bones" bit...is it telling of the mortality of humans, and the awareness of it? If it is, it is a very good, clear image. :D Great Job.
    | Posted on 2008-10-14 00:00:00 | by Twisted | [ Reply to This ]


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