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    dots Submission Name: places!dots
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    Author: concrete_rose
    ASL Info:    31/f/nc
    Elite Ratio:    2.59 - 43/52/34
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsplaces!dots
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    places aghast!
    what statements are incredible to the interpreter,
    this meaning of actions, remorseful shame,
    once outrightly spoken against moving tides itself.

    a soul so weak, so torn between the fences,
    devil stays peaked upon the backs of the reformers,
    the reformed so called translucent sinners.

    knowledge of the incredibiltiy of the defensive,
    the helpless, the weakened enough to be silenced,
    the ones that feed off of this, the webs they weave, the solitude.

    the clouds have once again overcasted themselves apparent,
    trying to retrieve the only sanity that is left,
    seemingly hanging on by a silk thread.

    the sanity inside of this, this vessel,
    this flesh, this breath, this temporary existence,
    their knowledge cannot be applicable to this experience,
    so silently the tides wash this away.




    Submitted on 2008-09-17 06:46:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i love this piece i think its a wonderful ballet of a beautiful let down or a blissful rain that washes everything away . when i read to me it means :
    that i'm able to make my own effect in the world and that is soo true .... thank you

    bloodstone
    | Posted on 2009-08-13 00:00:00 | by Bloodstone | [ Reply to This ]


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