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Poisonous words


Author: Krinchinian
ASL Info:    20/f/pa
Elite Ratio:    3.12 - 164 /231 /84
Words: 79
Class/Type: Poetry /Dark
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Poisonous words



Your lips speaking another's name
Taste like poison slowly killing me
You robbed the air from my lungs
leaving me gasping my next breath
My heart's been torn in half
And shredded like a piece of paper
Engulfed in flames, I yearn for the cold
Trying to feel the love we once had
Who knew forever would end so soon
Love once spoken, forever silenced
Left for dead with my bleeding heart
All because I dared to love you




Submitted on 2008-09-17 13:23:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I think this is awful. Were you in love with clichés or the greatest hits of your live journal? Keep this garbage in your myspace blog where it belongs. This is not poetry. It's a joke!
| Posted on 2008-09-19 00:00:00 | by eliwhitneyradio | [ Reply to This ]
  the poem was amazing i enjoyed it though i wish it was longer going into more detail abouut how you felt with him saying someone elses name
| Posted on 2008-09-18 00:00:00 | by darkonesgirl | [ Reply to This ]
  I really like it, although, I thought that the line "My heart's been torn in half" and other lines similar is a little unoriginal...But otherwise,
I like it.
And I liked the way how you described exactly why "My heart's been torn in half" later on though.
| Posted on 2008-09-18 00:00:00 | by MizzyInNevaland | [ Reply to This ]


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