Winter

Author: caspian ASL Info:    23/m/Denmark Elite Ratio:    2.31 - 134 /189 /57 Words: 70

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Winter

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I sense it in the grey light as it transcends upon the city I see it in your green eyes that slowly lowers their defences I hear it in the cool winds that creeps among the branches I feel it in the tight grip of arms demanding presence I smell it in the dark nights the fear of soon forgetting Winter, Winter please have mercy on my fragile summer soul

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