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Winter


Author: caspian
ASL Info:    23/m/Denmark
Elite Ratio:    2.31 - 134 /189 /57
Words: 70
Class/Type: Poetry /
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Winter



I sense it in the grey light
as it transcends upon the city
I see it in your green eyes
that slowly lowers their defences
I hear it in the cool winds
that creeps among the branches
I feel it in the tight grip
of arms demanding presence
I smell it in the dark nights
the fear of soon forgetting
Winter, Winter please have mercy
on my fragile summer soul




Submitted on 2008-09-17 18:15:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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