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Lost lagunes


Author: caspian
ASL Info:    23/m/Denmark
Elite Ratio:    2.31 - 134 /189 /57
Words: 31
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Lost lagunes



The lost lagunes
are gathering soon
to discuss their misfortunes
in hallways like ballrooms
They ponder on cushions
and wander on pillows
as peacefull as willows
on late summer nights




Submitted on 2008-09-17 18:20:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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