Lost lagunes

Author: caspian ASL Info:    23/m/Denmark Elite Ratio:    2.31 - 134 /189 /57 Words: 31

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Lost lagunes

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The lost lagunes are gathering soon to discuss their misfortunes in hallways like ballrooms They ponder on cushions and wander on pillows as peacefull as willows on late summer nights

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