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    dots Submission Name: Perhaps Lovedots
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    Author: Frank Maguire
    ASL Info:    57 / UK
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 1846/1390/288
    Words: 190
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 2604
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 1186



    Description:
       For everyone who is waiting and longing for love.


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    dotsPerhaps Lovedots
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    Perhaps love is, a state of mind
    Or a feeling deep within
    That grows and blooms most every day
    For the joy that it can bring
    Perhaps love is, so fleeting
    Like the blinking of an eye
    One minute it is with us
    Then the next, it passes by

    Perhaps love is, so many things
    That we cannot contemplate
    Like pure and raw emotions
    Or our destiny and fate
    Perhaps love is, most everything
    That causes us to crave
    For things that cannot ever be
    From the cradle to the grave

    Perhaps love is, the unison
    Of two people who are one
    Entwined in each and every way
    From dawn till setting sun
    Perhaps love is, the tie that binds
    Through life and death as well
    To meet again beyond the grave
    Be it heaven, be it hell

    Perhaps love will, find us one day
    So true without deceit
    And make us feel that we are whole
    Then set our hearts to beat
    Perhaps love can, give reason to
    Believe in destiny
    And someday soon, there will be love
    For you, as well as me





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    ||| Comments |||
      Hi Frank. I agree with most of what others have said. Here's an additional suggestion to think about: removing all the punctuation might give it more of a sense of immediacy.

    Annie
    | Posted on 2014-09-20 00:00:00 | by annie0888 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi, Frank and thanks for the reply.
    | Posted on 2014-09-15 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      Brilliant! Love is so many things and delivered in so many different packages..
    | Posted on 2011-12-19 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      It was an amazing poem. You expressed yourself wonderfully and showed a lot of feelings in the poem
    the diction was chosen carefully and the rhythm and rhyme were flowing and amazing.
    | Posted on 2008-09-27 00:00:00 | by Romance | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very different style of love poem that is absolutely delightful! It addresses the fickle and coy nature of love. Love is truly something that every human alive craves and seeks, and your excellent poem speaks aptly to the very nature of it! Philosophers say "love makes the world go round"! I say, "love is what the world goes round for"!!

    Outstanding work, my able friend!
    | Posted on 2008-09-18 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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