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    dots Submission Name: the truth about youdots
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    Author: Lover girl
    ASL Info:    17, female
    Elite Ratio:    4.39 - 83/54/24
    Words: 1392
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 548
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    Description:
       This is not quite the presentation that is poem is in but it still give the crazy feelings that were are running through my mind when I think of him!!!


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    dotsthe truth about youdots
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    ~THE TRUTH ABOUT YOU~

    The pain and loss you made me feel

    The confusion and the torcher

    The hurt I felt
    The day you left

    My heart forever broken
    The plague of never knowing
    The hope that died while growing

    AND
    The moment I recovered

    When the love I had
    AND

    The pain so sad
    AND
    The anger fled
    You returned!

    My world changed

    My life rearranged
    I let you back in

    My heart loved you again

    And in a sweet moment
    THE PAIN
    THE LOSS
    THE HURT
    THE GRIEF

    Walked out that door behind you!

    By: Katie Hegge




    Submitted on 2008-09-18 02:25:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was written very well. Not much wrong with it. Just a spelling error. Trocher should've been torture. Other than that it was great. I can really relate. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading

    »Haely«
    | Posted on 2008-09-18 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]


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