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    dots Submission Name: People Can't Changedots
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    Author: dancer06
    ASL Info:    20/f
    Elite Ratio:    4.73 - 232/171/44
    Words: 360
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 66
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    Bytes: 2290



    Description:
       Not for my ex, but for a potential. A hopeful of being happy.


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    dotsPeople Can't Changedots
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    I was hopeful
    Hopeful that you could change
    to be the man I need you to be
    Happy to be around you
    but knowing you weren't in God's grace
    because your past haunts you

    I was hopeful you could see
    your very own potential to do great
    Your potential to pick your life up again
    Off the ground that it shattered on
    And go from boy to man.

    I was hopeful you could see
    That I cared about you
    Cared so much it hurt to see you
    Living the life you live
    Like a vagabond without a set home
    Jumping to whoever was convienent

    I was hoping you wouldn't take advantage of me
    Hurt me because of your fear
    A fear that consumed you
    Your fear of failure
    which is why you never tried
    Tried to make something of yourself.

    I was hoping you could change
    You could stop the drugs
    Stop the self destruction
    I wanted you to escape your dystopia
    I could be your utopia
    I can be the greatest thing in your life.

    I was hopeful I wouldn't run myself.
    You instability scared me
    Scared me to the point I couldn't be your girl
    Couldn't put a label on you and I.
    But I've paid for your mistakes.
    I've taken your burden and made it my own.

    But that is the end of us.
    I cared too much, you ran away.
    You couldn't change your ways.
    I couldn't help make you that better person.
    I couldn't compliment you enough.
    Not enough to make you see your potential.

    This is the end of hoping.
    I will no longer tell you great things.
    The amazingness that comes from living
    I will let you fall this time.
    Into your darkness surrounded by your hate.
    This time was only borrowed.

    I will no longer hope.
    I will no longer believe
    I'm beginning to think I was deceived.
    I thought you wanted more
    I thought I could help you acheive more
    But you're a hypocrit and you will fall on your own this time.

    And on your time alone... no longer mine.




    Submitted on 2008-09-18 15:26:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I liked how you kept having hope for the guy. Telling him the things that could bring him up. However even if it hurts you should never give up on someone because for all you know you could be the reason they are still alive. You might want to go back and fix some of your sections because you have some that rhyme with another line and others that don't rhyme with any of the other lines in the section.
    | Posted on 2008-10-06 00:00:00 | by DemonofHeaven | [ Reply to This ]


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