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    dots Submission Name: regretful memoriesdots

    Author: darkonesgirl
    ASL Info:    21/f/sc
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 233/245/125
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsregretful memoriesdots

    my heart is throbing
    my tears are streaming
    i gave you my heart
    i gave you my soul
    i feel like youve betrayed me
    how could you hide
    something like that
    from me for so long
    wernt we dating then
    dont give me no bullshit
    about you protecting yourself
    you say you always loved me
    then how could you do this to me

    Submitted on 2008-09-18 19:19:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      OK, first off, I personally hate people that just leave comments to dis the writer. If your not going to leave a respectful comment, or a constructive critique, don't say a thing. If you don't like the poem, hit the little button in your upper left corner that says "back". No one cares what you don't like.

    Sorry about that, as for the poem, I actually liked it. It seemed like more of a Rebel (non-southern) poem. Keep writing no matter what douche bags like eli say. Just go ahead and toss that out the window. Hes just a poor little bored kid that has to take showers with his mom. Peace and Providence.

    | Posted on 2008-09-19 00:00:00 | by faded color | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem is a waste of text. It is littered with spelling and grammar errors. Your sad attempt to communicate cliché thoughts should be kept to yourself.
    | Posted on 2008-09-19 00:00:00 | by eliwhitneyradio | [ Reply to This ]
      hmmm... this poem is more of a collection of thoughts. i enjoy it. it is chaotic. it is somewhat depressing, but "dont give me no bull[censored]
    about you protecting yourself" lead me to believe that possibly you are angry at your lover because they killed someone. That is rediculous. hm. i enjoyed it much.
    | Posted on 2008-09-18 00:00:00 | by Old | [ Reply to This ]

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