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    dots Submission Name: TEAOSdots
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    Author: lovedeathsdeath
    ASL Info:    20/M/NCUSA
    Elite Ratio:    5.28 - 39/43/33
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
    Total Views: 150
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 559



    Description:
       This is a little different from most of the stuff I write. I wanted an attempt at one of those choppy type poems. This is the end result.


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    Nothing-
    Life is fleeting.
    Run past the headlights
    into the word you do not know.

    obscure meaning
    no meaning
    communicate.

    Write back
    waves of puissance.
    Show power
    what you are.
    Reply.

    Nothing.
    Life is fleeting.
    Moving past the last realm
    where the gamma ray does end.

    It is coming,
    Nothing.
    Why worry?

    End of all
    brings nihility.
    Nothing is coming.
    Life is at end.




    Submitted on 2008-09-19 03:49:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Who knew that such simple words could bring such emotion... I'm not quite sure what to say about this piece... And trust me, that is a good thing.

    Reading that, an over surge of emotions rushed through me. Confusion, sadness, and truth.

    The way you worded everything was simply splendid! Though I do have a small suggestion. At the beginning of the last stanza I would put "The" to start it off. If you chose to or not would not make much of a difference, I just think it would make it flow a little better. x) Again, I loved this piece... Absolutely and most definitely one of my favorites!

    Kudos!
    ~ Lens


    | Posted on 2008-09-19 00:00:00 | by Pinky345 | [ Reply to This ]



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