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    dots Submission Name: Afternoon Walkdots
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    Author: freshcookies
    Elite Ratio:    4.15 - 63/77/45
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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    Description:
       Something sort of in the manner of the Jabberwocky and/or Dr. Seuss.


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    dotsAfternoon Walkdots
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    I met a man a-gallivanting
    On a dead end street.
    His corgi pup was grimly stanting
    Nipping at his feet.

    He cried “Hello! And Gambilo!
    My friend, oh what a day!
    The cortahoos and pranti-crows
    Are snootling away!

    “The sun is casting shadows
    On my chorky little sploot,
    And zippy-snappy-kados
    Have been crawling in my boot!”

    I grinned at him and said “good day,
    To you and to your zeet”
    And he biftapped his merry way
    Along the dead end street.




    Submitted on 2008-09-20 06:21:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is very original and creative and I just loved it.. The rhyme and flow are very well written, and even though a few of the strange words tripped up my tongue a little it made it more fun to read, rather than annoying, kinda like reading dr. suess.. great job..
    | Posted on 2008-09-20 00:00:00 | by Maskannai | [ Reply to This ]


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