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    dots Submission Name: Black Chariot c. by ruejacobs 9/20/08 12:45 a.m. dots
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    Author: ruejacobs
    ASL Info:    37/feminazi/Gehenna
    Elite Ratio:    4.91 - 566/440/154
    Words: 362
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       about the bf and his daughter


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    dotsBlack Chariot c. by ruejacobs 9/20/08 12:45 a.m. dots
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    The god particle,
    He says and laughs
    He is holding his daughter’s hand
    And what is dark matter to him?
    A punchline, perhaps.

    She has, has
    -not had I won’t say had-
    A voice like abalone
    Iridescent and truculent it shines
    He’s curled around her like a spiral shell
    He shields this pearl
    From the swing of a star
    Hides her from the scimitar moon

    And the tide is calling to us now.
    Churning debris along past the shore
    It exposes the bones of ancient wrecks
    Proof of the cruelty of Poseidon
    A lesson in disaster
    Who knows what undertow
    Prowls this sand beneath our feet?
    Submerged and holding our breath
    We wait for it
    And where is Moses when we need him
    The desert prophet with his staff
    To command the ocean be still
    Not here, as far as I can see…

    I’ll trust in voiceless mermaids
    And sing nursery rhymes to an infant Venus
    As sea-borne as a tear
    I wish I were a manta-ray
    With a venomous maw
    And a whiplash tail that stings
    Instead of flotsam drifting in the water

    Oh, Moses led man once, it’s said
    Out past these waves and onto dry land
    That chariot was washed away
    The soldiers drowned

    Here in underwater caverns
    The mermaid holds the hour-glass
    I could shake it
    And listen to the dry rasp of sand
    Sifting Fate to its destination
    But I haven’t the courage to break the glass
    I have bled before
    Bright crimson petals unfurling against the blue
    Spreading like a constellation

    I want to cradle the shell
    Hold it to my ear
    To listen to the ticking within
    The breath of the ocean

    I’ve been treading water
    For too damned long
    The weight of this water
    Is more fickle than blood

    The ocean-tide of his heartbeat
    Carries me further from the shore
    And here is a different Moses
    As fierce as a sea-hawk

    We draw our power from the Deep
    As the armies appear on the beach
    Heaven help the foe that faces him now
    Nothing will take his treasure from him.





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    ||| Comments |||
      stethoscope test revealed nothing
    couldn't find the beat.
    must have left with summer birds.
    must have gone southwest.

    ¿dónde es mi verano corazón?
    ¿baile en el sol de la trompeta?
    ¿perdido en el sonido de lengüetas extrañas?
    ¿eléctrico en el polvo?

    winter is the longest reason
    for books and dreams, death and doors.

    ¿cuanto tiempo hasta los ríos fluya?
    ¿cuanto tiempo hasta mi amor del verano?

    how long? how long?
    | Posted on 2008-09-28 00:00:00 | by ever | [ Reply to This ]
      Mom,
    Beautiful.
    She is his daughter. Nothing severes that.

    <3.
    Carrie
    | Posted on 2008-09-26 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]


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