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    dots Submission Name: Daylight thieverydots
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    Author: Robert Neville
    ASL Info:    16/m/London
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 10/192/232
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsDaylight thieverydots
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    Daylight thievery


    Kissable lips teasing me onwards
    Lucky lisp making me move downwards
    Piano belt removed from your waist
    Underwear that I donít want there, remove, no haste
    A cocked machine gun ready to explode
    My mouth open waiting for a load
    But as I wait and you move
    The door bursts open,
    And the moment, we had it to lose


    Thief! Thief! Thief! That man is a thief
    He stole my dream moment, daylight thievery
    Never get the chance again,
    The chance of teenage buggery


    Fluffy boy hair controlling my sight
    Eyes so green I sigh at night
    Converse shoes removed from your feet
    Underwear off, hips I want to meet
    Machine gun raring to unload
    My mouth waiting for another episode
    And when you go, it hits me
    The door opens again
    And the moment we had, its on my face

    Thief! Thief! Thief! That man is a thief
    He stole my dream moment, daylight thievery
    Never get the chance again,
    The chance of teenage buggery




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