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    dots Submission Name: Lightdots
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    Author: every48seconds
    ASL Info:    25/M/toronto
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 123/163/129
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
    Total Views: 661
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    Bytes: 457



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    dotsLightdots
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    Flash little light flash
    Glide through the night sky
    Catch the eyes of everyone
    Bring them all in for the night
    The skaters, the b-boys, the hustlers
    The clubbers and the work-a-holics
    Get them all to stop the work and play
    And just stare at you
    Oh my beautiful light, flash on
    Bring peace to the world just as you always have
    Let the warmth fill them up
    Flash little light flash




    Submitted on 2008-09-21 03:18:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a good piece that gave a verry distinct picture in my minds ey, though I'm sure everyones would be a little different because you left it verry open to interpretation which is great. I saw it as a shooting star that was actually bright enough to be seen over a large city and everyone just kinda stopped what they were doing to watch it decend and disapear. Great piece, Keep writing.

    Sarah
    | Posted on 2008-09-22 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]
      That was a nice little poem easy to read and flowed beautifully. What I got from it was perhaps the light is a comet, or whatever it may be, and that its sudden streak across the night sky caught everyone's eye and made them stop their busy, hustling lives. People hardly take a moment to just stop and enjoy the simpe things in life, 'stop and smell the roses' as the saying goes. Nice write!

    Peace v

    Rena
    | Posted on 2008-09-21 00:00:00 | by Renada | [ Reply to This ]


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