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    dots Submission Name: Haikudots
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    Author: essence of life
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 33/38/21
    Words: 55
    Class/Type: Haiku/Nostalgia
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    dotsHaikudots
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    Happiness is here
    joy and bliss overwhelm us
    happiness arrives

    The great depression
    has taken so many lives
    depression will arise

    Cold lifeless silence
    that means a life has been lost
    Mister Grim is coming

    My friends have left me
    since that day i've felt alone
    everyday i blame me





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      Great! I love haiku's.
    "Happiness is here
    joy and bliss overwhelm us
    happiness arrives"

    I love the way you began with happiness.

    "The great depression
    has taken so many lives
    depression will arise"

    Then pull it to the depression.

    "Cold lifeless silence
    that means a life has been lost
    Mister Grim is coming"

    And then comes death.

    "My friends have left me
    since that day i've felt alone
    everyday i blame me"

    Then the loneliness.

    Its all life, in a short yet explanatory manner.


    Everything has its end.

    Fana

    | Posted on 2009-04-22 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      ahh very well written haiku its pretty hard to do these actually...well i've never had any luck xD but anyway i liked how you tie in the 1st and 3rd stanzas of each lines connecting them together by some form of words with the second.
    | Posted on 2009-01-22 00:00:00 | by Twin_Snakes | [ Reply to This ]


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