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Submission Name: Haiku dots

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Author:	essence of life
Elite Ratio:	3.12 - 30/34/20
Words:	55

Class/Type:	Haiku/Nostalgia
Total Views:	118
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
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Haiku

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Happiness is here
joy and bliss overwhelm us
happiness arrives

The great depression
has taken so many lives
depression will arise

Cold lifeless silence
that means a life has been lost
Mister Grim is coming

My friends have left me
since that day i've felt alone
everyday i blame me

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Great! I love haiku's.
"Happiness is here
joy and bliss overwhelm us
happiness arrives"

I love the way you began with happiness.

"The great depression
has taken so many lives
depression will arise"

Then pull it to the depression.

"Cold lifeless silence
that means a life has been lost
Mister Grim is coming"

And then comes death.

"My friends have left me
since that day i've felt alone
everyday i blame me"

Then the loneliness.

Its all life, in a short yet explanatory manner.

Everything has its end.

Fana

| Posted on 2009-04-22 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
ahh very well written haiku its pretty hard to do these actually...well i've never had any luck xD but anyway i liked how you tie in the 1st and 3rd stanzas of each lines connecting them together by some form of words with the second.
| Posted on 2009-01-22 00:00:00 | by Twin_Snakes | [ Reply to This ]

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