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    dots Submission Name: Going Insanedots
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    Author: daughterofdeath
    ASL Info:    18/F/West Virginia
    Elite Ratio:    4.83 - 262/263/207
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Dark
    Total Views: 123
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 932



    Description:
       Now quite done yet.
    I just want people to just check over it. I don't really expect anyone to understand it, if you do, wow.

    Dedication: Chris Lynch


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    dotsGoing Insanedots
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    My head is going in circles
    I'm getting dizzy again.
    I'm losing control of my life
    This shouldn't happen.

    The wind is twirling around me
    And I think I'm going crazy.
    The world is spinning out of my control.
    I think there's someone laughing
    And I know there's someone screaming
    It makes me wonder if it is my soul.
    Nothings the same
    As you go insane.

    Black raindrops falling down
    on top of my head.
    Pounding on it like the pain
    I get when I let you in my bed.

    The wind is twirling around me
    And I think I'm going crazy.
    The world is spinning out of my control.
    I think there's someone laughing
    And I know there's someone screaming
    It makes me wonder if it is my soul.
    Nothings the same
    As you go insane.




    Submitted on 2008-09-21 14:04:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a great poem. Where did you get your inspiration for this poem from?
    | Posted on 2008-09-22 00:00:00 | by Rachel Ruff | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really interesting and I can't wait for the rest of it.. The idea of forbidden fruit tasted and liked is good and you have portrayed it well in this..
    | Posted on 2008-09-21 00:00:00 | by Maskannai | [ Reply to This ]


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