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    dots Submission Name: A Man to Mandots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Misc/Comedy
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    dotsA Man to Mandots
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    This man and this man
    face to face
    a mirror in each hand so the other can see
    he
    and
    he

    What an absurd position you seem to take
    your back is hunched and your arms are bent at the elbow

    a bow
    against a bow
    when the two should see

    EgogE

    Intertwined like my sense of destiny

    Here come now, let's listen
    and keep our eyes focused on the road

    in the corner there is the beat like the base
    drum muffled drum burboan

    let it roll
    and crank

    the sweet melody rocking back and forth
    harmonica
    harmony

    knees just jumble up and down

    one plus one
    two
    and back to one if they could see
    a negative and a positive can attract




    Submitted on 2008-09-21 17:12:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      EgogE... mirrored egos, right? clever. at first, i thought this was a type of tuning, but 'o' didn't make any sense.

    so, are you really talking about one man's struggle with himself, or literally two people? i'll assume the former as it makes more sense.

    what inspired this? seeing a musician up on stage in apparent conflict with himself? i've played live a good dozen times or so, and in my experience, there's always conflict in some way: "is it ever good enough? are people enjoying? oh my god, i just hit a bum note but i hope no-one heard it" ...that sort of thing.

    or maybe this is one overall metaphor about how two men should just resolve their obvious differences and get along, move along to the music and just enjoy it, without bias and prejudice getting in the way, as evidenced by your last line: polar opposites, black/white, no grey ground, no harmony, etc.

    well, whatever, it was an interesting ride.
    | Posted on 2008-10-13 00:00:00 | by meoww | [ Reply to This ]
      It is very abstract. A man to man between the same person? One and one makes two and then back to one? EgogE? Abstract stuff is cool. But what does this mean? It is very image inducing. And swaying a bit -- but what does it all mean?
    | Posted on 2008-10-05 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      Your writing just gets a little more strange by the minute. Perhaps I just do not understand.
    | Posted on 2008-09-21 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]


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