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waking up to see the real me


Author: truefruit06
ASL Info:    14/m/IN
Elite Ratio:    1.5 - 6 /22 /44
Words: 82
Class/Type: Poetry /Being a Teen
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waking up to see the real me



can he see the real me
hiding behind the sight
on the outside

can he see the fake image
that i hide behind
what i try to conceal

will i even ever wake
to a real me
somthing i want to be
stronger i hope i will

will he ever see the real me
what hides behind the fogged glass frame
what is unseable by the naked eye
the real me i try to hide




Submitted on 2008-09-22 14:54:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i rly liked teh flow of this work and they melonchally tone to it. i love that it arouses emotion in me, because even though, idk your sitation, i know that i, among others, can identify with it. i love how you get your point across, but leave it simple but not necessairly point blank. i enjoyed it nice one~
| Posted on 2008-09-23 00:00:00 | by Gwenith Louise | [ Reply to This ]


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