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Might I find Peace?

Author: Maskannai
ASL Info:    28/Female/Utah
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Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Something I was thinking about when I was thinking regarding how my child will bree brought up..

Might I find Peace?

Some day, I wonder,
might I know at last
the peace that settles within
when perfect faith is achieved?

A lifetime it seems and I have spent it searching,
never knowing what is right
for feeling, in the unknown,
is harder than it seems;

I see with my eyes
hands folded in prayer
or lifted in praise,
yet it does not stir me;

I feel with my heart
how the warmth of peace should be,
yet somehow it eludes me
and leaves me alone in the darkness;

I hear with my ears
pained cries that seem
to come from nowhere and everywhere
and then I realize they are mine;

And still, I wonder,
that perhaps some day
whether soon or very distant
I might find my peace.

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  I absolutely love this poem. And I agree with Raphael, it does seem a little like Sylvia Plath's poem. I would say you will find peace, but I'm still trying to find my own piece. This poem is like the story of my life, the words that I'm trying to get out. All in all, I believe you wrote a wonderful poem and can't think of anything that could or should be changed.

Nice Write
| Posted on 2008-09-26 00:00:00 | by daughterofdeath | [ Reply to This ]
  You will find Peace my Friend
That I Promise you
Never give up that Hope you have and the dream for Peace we both share
My Friend I Strongly believe World Peace is a Reality very easily within our reach
We have to stop discriminating against people for whatever reason and realize the answer to inner Peace and World Peace is right in Front of us
The answer is Love Sweet Love
Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
Thank You
God Bless
I will be Praying for you
| Posted on 2008-09-23 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  Peace, along with many things is an ilisuion. There is not peace in this world. Those that claim to have it have simply mistaken happiness and contentment for it. True peace is to be found in the next life, not this one. This life is to prepare you to handle that peace, for when you really stop to think about it, true peace is a very scary concept.
| Posted on 2008-09-23 00:00:00 | by nicodemous | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked this poem,it paints a real picture of how you see the world (I think!),there is the un-certainty and insecurity,but also an im-movable hope,

my favourite lines were:

"I hear with my ears
pained cries that seem
to come from nowhere and everywhere
and then I realize they are mine"

they can be negative or positive,but i liked to look at it as you seeing yourself in your childs fears and anxietys,that they will have to face those obstacles just as you have,anyway whatever the meaning i did enjoy this poem,

it read like an anti-thesis to Sylvia Plaths "poem child"

thank you for the read

| Posted on 2008-09-23 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]

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