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    dots Submission Name: Hope Needs a Settingdots
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    Author: Keiran
    ASL Info:    20/M/NZ
    Elite Ratio:    5.64 - 40/47/33
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsHope Needs a Settingdots
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    Campfire blues
    Bring us into alignment
    And for a few hours
    We all become
    Nothing more than what the song let's us be

    Nothing more than what we wanted all along
    To bleed together
    Forever
    Or just for one whimsical evening
    When everything's within reach of our flitting flame

    Until the future
    Where a jealous sun pushes the reality shine on us
    Keeping hope for the dark moments
    When only we can radiate

    And if we glow together
    We can illuminate the deepest darkest things
    Which yellow rays never touched

    So won't you come and shine with me
    Tonight




    Submitted on 2008-09-23 01:59:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This write my Friend I found to be a Fantastic write that describes the meaning of Friendship perfectly
    While reading this I was brought back to days as a child in the Boy Scouts with fellow scouts surronding me and all we wanted was to have nature bring us all together as best Friends forever
    Thank You for bringing me back to my youth if only for a little while
    How I wish I could have stayed a child forever
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2008-09-23 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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