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my true lover


Author: truefruit06
ASL Info:    14/m/IN
Elite Ratio:    1.5 - 6 /22 /44
Words: 54
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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i guess i should put myself back out there for someone new (cause my last bf was a pig) and i think i may have found him


my true lover



as he waits for me
and tries to be
the single perfect one

He envelops me
and even sees
how flawed i really am

his selfless care
his love to share
and all of it for me

the shattered shards
have come together
and now me and him can be together




Submitted on 2008-09-23 12:35:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Whoops! I just now noticed that you are a guy! So sorry for my mistaken comment concerning gender!!
| Posted on 2008-09-23 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked Robert's comment! You have a developing talent that has produced a really nice poem here! Bravo, lovely lady!
| Posted on 2008-09-23 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
  Sometimes love is two broken pieces
that fit together. Nice write.

The Poor Man's Poet.
| Posted on 2008-09-23 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]


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