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    Author: nolram
    ASL Info:    29/M
    Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 58/61/33
    Words: 225
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       Wrote this about a girl I thought was out of my life, who suddenly called me a little more than two weeks ago. It reawakened possibilities.


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    Baby I'm not a fighter, but I would fight for you

    Maybe I need to be lighter, but I know the truth

    We don't have eternity

    Someday we'll all be dead

    So here's what I'm going to do, straight from my chest:

    Pour a little love into a spoon

    mix it with your soul and play you a little tune,

    maybe you will know that I am the one

    Maybe love is something to behold and the start is yet to come

    Hopefully it will be soon

    My heart misses the sun



    Sitting around I think to myself:

    This isn't the Beach Boys, we don't need to wait

    This is now and you and I can share fate

    but instead we wallow away the days

    Searching...

    finding nothing but walls impossible to cross

    impenetrable borders in the forest of the lost

    hollow eyes perched on a caustic cross

    mystical times in a shared vision, fleeting

    and lost

    Time is NOT on our side

    Please baby open your eyes

    I will be your everything

    I will not lie

    I know what to do

    Give me some time

    I'll fight for you





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      This was written very well and I can very much relate. I hope it ends better for you than it did for me. Aweosme write. Keep up the great work, and I'll keep reading

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    | Posted on 2008-09-26 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]
      Cute, understandable.

    Baby this isn't the Beach boys...
    "Woudn't it be nice if we were older...?"
    Yeah, that's pretty much which song, I thought you were making a referance to.
    I think of love poured into a soul like cream into coffee.
    | Posted on 2008-09-25 00:00:00 | by Mieko | [ Reply to This ]


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