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Wrote this about a girl I thought was out of my life, who suddenly called me a little more than two weeks ago. It reawakened possibilities.
Baby I'm not a fighter, but I would fight for you
Maybe I need to be lighter, but I know the truth
We don't have eternity
Someday we'll all be dead
So here's what I'm going to do, straight from my chest:
Pour a little love into a spoon
mix it with your soul and play you a little tune,
maybe you will know that I am the one
Maybe love is something to behold and the start is yet to come
Hopefully it will be soon
My heart misses the sun
Sitting around I think to myself:
This isn't the Beach Boys, we don't need to wait
This is now and you and I can share fate
but instead we wallow away the days
finding nothing but walls impossible to cross
impenetrable borders in the forest of the lost
hollow eyes perched on a caustic cross
mystical times in a shared vision, fleeting
Time is NOT on our side
Please baby open your eyes
I will be your everything
I will not lie
I know what to do
Give me some time
I'll fight for you
Submitted on 2008-09-24 11:50:16
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This was written very well and I can very much relate. I hope it ends better for you than it did for me. Aweosme write. Keep up the great work, and I'll keep reading
| Posted on 2008-09-26 00:00:00 | by
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Baby this isn't the Beach boys...
"Woudn't it be nice if we were older...?"
Yeah, that's pretty much which song, I thought you were making a referance to.
I think of love poured into a soul like cream into coffee.
| Posted on 2008-09-25 00:00:00 | by
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