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    dots Submission Name: I Could Neverdots
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    Author: Frank Maguire
    ASL Info:    57 / UK
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 1846/1390/288
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1310
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 885



    Description:
       Some thoughts.........


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    dotsI Could Neverdots
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    I could never love you more my dear
    Than I do this lonely night
    My mind is drowned with thoughts of you
    As you set my heart to flight
    You seem to be within my soul
    And every breath I take
    Always you are next to me
    With every move I make

    I could never love you more my dear
    If I lived two hundred years
    You always hold me when I cry
    And wipe away my tears
    If days are blue and nights are long
    When my worries trouble me
    You always find the way ahead
    So the answer I can see

    I could never love you more my dear
    If I tried with all my might
    You are the strength that spurs me on
    And you are my guiding light
    The one to give me reason
    To believe in all I do
    From now until eternity
    I always will love you




    Submitted on 2008-09-24 20:34:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      YESSSS! The comment box is officially back. Score.
    I agree that this is a lovely poem. I especially like the last stanza.
    The last line cleans it up nicely with a simple summation.
    What is to be expected? You are Frank, after all.
    | Posted on 2008-10-22 00:00:00 | by The Conqueror | [ Reply to This ]
      Frank, I am never dissapointed by your outstanding poems! This is a delightful love poem, without equal I would say! It is tender, caring, intensely human, and a delight to all who have ever loved or been in love! I bet the lady in your life really 'swooned' when she read this!

    Outstanding work again, my talented friend!
    | Posted on 2008-09-24 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very nice poem. It flows well and I like how the first line repeats. It made me feel all fuzzy inside, I'm glad you didn't use words like baby or sexy, those make me think "yuck" and they just ruin love poems. Dear is a very sweat word though and the person who you wrote this poem for is very lucky.
    I believe my favorite lines were:
    "You are the strength that spurs me on and you are my guiding light".

    Very good for just 'some thoughts'.
    ~Chelle~
    | Posted on 2008-09-24 00:00:00 | by Priestess | [ Reply to This ]


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