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    dots Submission Name: What Can't Be Seen.dots
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    Author: BestxDeceptions
    ASL Info:    22, Female, Kentucky.
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 25/66/49
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsWhat Can't Be Seen.dots
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    This silence is bleeding,
    Spilling to an octave
    much higher than this place.
    Would you kill it,
    spitting shards into this wound?

    I need some solace
    when the day dies down.
    My eyes glued shut
    and my wishes granted;
    My arms full.

    If all fails,
    The world shall turn numb,
    make me promises, so I beg.
    I have the ability
    to believe what can't be seen




    Submitted on 2008-09-25 03:59:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      you broke the mirror. poe
    | Posted on 2008-09-26 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]


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