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    dots Submission Name: Breathingdots
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    Author: BestxDeceptions
    ASL Info:    22, Female, Kentucky.
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 25/66/49
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsBreathingdots
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    Sometimes I need a reason to breath.
    I need just a moment to sigh and exhale.
    It's my weakness, this breathing thing;
    It tends to keep me sane.

    When I can't understand you,
    I forget it. It slips away and I drown you out.
    Explain to me where it comes from.
    How can you treat me the way you do?

    It's something different everyday.
    I never know how to take you.
    I'm not sure if today you're ok.
    It drives me crazy.

    Could you show me something?
    Could you, for once, just for me, be a man?
    I'm not so sure you know how.
    I'm not waiting.

    So when you see me breathing,
    could you just walk away,
    and let me be?
    I need that from you.




    Submitted on 2008-09-25 04:01:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      hi, a little to aware, but to the point. poe
    | Posted on 2008-09-26 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      that was wounderfull i like what your saying in this (especially with my lover i never do understand him)
    | Posted on 2008-09-25 00:00:00 | by truefruit06 | [ Reply to This ]


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