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    dots Submission Name: Spirit Fishdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 31
    Class/Type: Prose/Nature
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    Bytes: 273



    Description:
       Fishing at a lake with my father yesterday - we share our love of the outdoors and respect for all nature
    Sending out love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share


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    dotsSpirit Fishdots
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    Many gracious thank yous
    Spirit Fish
    For your
    color
    feeds my
    soul
    Bountiful Spirit
    the Lake
    has brought
    us together
    And, as we
    Sup
    let us
    Become
    Union
    of
    Nature




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      You write very large with small words and a short paragraph. It is like a personification of an action. That action being fishing of course. I also like how I had to read downward, vice reading across. I know it seems small, but I don't think it would have felt as epic had I read in a different way. KUDOS
    | Posted on 2008-09-27 00:00:00 | by Silver20G | [ Reply to This ]
      Tiffany, the more you write like this, the more I'm convinced you are Native. All your poems have that 'spiritual connection w/ nature' theme, and I love it.

    This is truly what it means to be light. To transcend humanity and dive into the forest, the lake, the sky.

    I really love the last part of this:

    "let us
    Become
    Union
    of
    Nature"

    It fills my heart with glad tidings to see you become one with Jehovah's creation.

    May you sing until the sunset of your heart.

    ~Asiaticfox
    | Posted on 2008-09-25 00:00:00 | by AsiaticFox | [ Reply to This ]
      How wonderful nature's beauty is in the eye of one who sees it clearly! Beautiful scene---and even more lovely to know you shared some precious time with your father surrounded by the great outdoors. :-) Sharon
    | Posted on 2008-09-25 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      The Spirit Of The Lake and the Spirit Fish embrace you in a union of mankind and nature! And, may their embrace always be as inspiring and delightful as your excellent poem! I grew up in the Out of Doors, and love poems with a nature theme. Your poem is just excellent, and delightfully dispenses a mood of appreciation of nature and the outdoors!

    Three cheers!
    | Posted on 2008-09-25 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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