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    dots Submission Name: My Dream Paradisedots
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    Author: poet09
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    dotsMy Dream Paradisedots
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    A place I dream of
    up in the clouds about
    Where you and I can go
    that special place no one knows

    The sun shines oh so bright
    just like the stars in the night
    And your radiant beauty glows
    causing everything around you to grow

    We kiss, the birds sing
    listen to the wedding bells ring
    The sun shines down on you
    a person so lovely and true

    This paradise I dream of
    there is no pain, just love
    There is a soft pleasant breeze
    its so calming with you, its perfect peace




    Submitted on 2008-09-25 17:59:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very nicely writen I like the flow of the poem and how it seem to let your imagination wonder off the page. I really like this poem,

    totojane03
    | Posted on 2009-08-21 00:00:00 | by totojane03 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was written very well. It was very sweet and touching. I am sincerely glad you found someone to make you feel so happy. I hope you never lose that. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading

    »Haely«
    | Posted on 2008-09-25 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]


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