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    dots Submission Name: Hole Hearteddots
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    Author: faideddarkness
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
    Elite Ratio:    6.47 - 99/55/49
    Words: 276
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 465
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    Bytes: 2079



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    dotsHole Hearteddots
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    Sharing together
    Our remembrance
    Already discarded
    Our future
    Youíve accepted
    Itís already started, already started
    Lost in hole hearted

    Iím falling, Iíve fallen
    Into the void Iíve sunken
    Only images of you
    Keep these eyes open to
    Seeing a world both
    That we have created
    Now I watch it fall apart
    From the pieces of my heart

    I never wanted to die
    Never wanting to cry
    Held together by your two hands
    But now Iím dreaming
    Myself falling
    From my love that youíve just band
    Sharing together
    Our remembrance
    Already discarded
    Our future
    Youíve accepted
    Itís already started, already started
    Lost in hole hearted

    See you stand on the shore side
    Your eyes reaching over seas
    Feeling this world close around me
    Is there anything to believe?
    Never feeling hole
    Until Iíve become empty
    The words your lips have spoken
    Will never be forgiving

    Sharing together
    Our remembrance
    Already discarded
    Our future
    Youíve accepted
    Itís already started, already started
    Lost in hole hearted

    Even though I think of you
    I canít remember anymore
    This heart may look open
    But within itís all closed doors
    I can see you crying
    As you stare into the sky
    Not another word spoken
    And we both begin to die

    Held together by your two hands
    But now Iím dreaming
    Myself falling
    From my love that youíve just band
    Sharing together
    Our remembrance
    Already discarded
    Our future
    Youíve accepted
    Itís already started, already started

    Sharing together
    Our remembrance
    Already discarded
    Our future
    Youíve accepted
    Iíve already parted, already parted
    I die Ė hole hearted





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