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    dots Submission Name: Keep Me Livingdots
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    Author: faideddarkness
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
    Elite Ratio:    6.53 - 101/55/51
    Words: 221
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 644
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1417



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    dotsKeep Me Livingdots
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    Wake me up
    Make me alive
    Open my heart
    Open my eyes

    Itís been cold in here
    For ten long years
    Is it any question
    That Iím alive
    Trapped in here all alone
    Iím almost gone
    Someone wake me up
    From deep inside

    Wake me up, Make me alive
    Open my heart, Open my eyes
    Keep me breathing, my heart beating
    My existence, Keep me living
    Keep me breathing, Keep me living

    Hearing anything
    Lay here hoping
    What has been with held
    Comes back to me
    Youíre holding something
    Hands in hiding
    Bindings to my soul
    That sets me free

    Wake me up, Make me alive
    Open my heart, Open my eyes
    Keep me breathing, My heart beating
    My existence, Keep me living
    Keep me breathing, Keep me living

    Finding my way out
    I try to shout
    But your already here
    Ready to fight
    breaking down my wall
    You catch my fall
    Youíve come to save me
    Holding tightly

    Wake me up, Make me alive
    Open my heart, Open my eyes
    Keep me breathing, my heart beating
    My existence, Keep me living
    Keep me breathing, Keep me living
    Itís been cold in here, for ten long years
    Was it any question, I was alive




    Submitted on 2008-09-25 19:14:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      To me it sounds more like a poem rather than lyrics to a song.

    I like how you worded the chorus:
    "Keep me breathing, my heart beating
    My existence, Keep me living
    Keep me breathing, Keep me living"

    Repetition makes the whole piece of art stronger
    | Posted on 2008-09-25 00:00:00 | by Rayelyn | [ Reply to This ]


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