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Underneath


Author: Emerging Soul
ASL Info:    48/VERY female/Wisconsin
Elite Ratio:    4.36 - 1240 /1114 /244
Words: 118
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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mmmmmm.....just musing...


Underneath


Peel back the layers of me
I do not wish to hide
Each strip of hesitation
Cast away
Revealing pieces never seen before
Emotions that are new
Greet the raw reaction
Invite the giving in
I do not want to rehearse for you
I just want to feel your sin
I am wrapped
Tightly
I wish to find release
Tear me open from the inside
Let me do as I please
For I wish to
Reassemble
As a creature touched
But different
The knowing of you
Has changed me
Metamorphasized me
Into who I am
I wish to
Not be
Stagnant
An ever-churning wave
Becoming myself
Again and again
Not knowing
Just who I am
Underneath




Submitted on 2004-07-07 11:44:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  For I wish to
Reassemble
As a creature touched
But different
The knowing of you
Has changed me
Metamorphasized me
Into who I am

I like those words. A true loving, passionate relationship has the abilty to wrap around a person's conscienceness and make them more of who they already are. It can bring out the best and the worst.
| Posted on 2004-07-07 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]
  Peel back the layers of me
I do not wish to hide
Each strip of hesitation
Cast away
Revealing pieces never seen before
these were my favorite parts. this was great keep them coming. lia
| Posted on 2004-07-07 00:00:00 | by lili | [ Reply to This ]
  Being stagnant ain't no good at all. I love "An ever-churning wave, becoming myself again and again." That's so good! For me, that made the whole piece come together. Good write.
| Posted on 2004-07-13 00:00:00 | by Black Rock Tractor | [ Reply to This ]


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