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    dots Submission Name: Wrong, right?dots
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    Author: Aknahlij_d 1
    ASL Info:    17/Male/Loueezy
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 369/516/136
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1009
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    dotsWrong, right?dots
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    We blur the lines spread across the wide plain of correct
    And in this we find fitness, run and some attain a litmus
    The colors run red and dumbed down and some said
    That run down boys made sun-up to sun-down men
    But some time boys stay boys, cuz a slap on the wrist
    And a swollen hand don't mean shit...
    Just leaves me pissed
    The same stones we skip across styx
    Hit my achilles, and rendered me silly
    I must be dizzy, cuz the room is spinning
    And i don't know what's right to say
    We don't have to fight some days
    Cuz my word is a wooden and your contradictions are miter saws




    Submitted on 2008-09-26 01:07:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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