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pins "n" needles

Author: jermwerm
ASL Info:    26/m/FRESNO CA
Elite Ratio:    4.29 - 203 /268 /83
Words: 68
Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
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pins "n" needles

Pins "n" needles,
hit an run.
Taste of breath,
content to cum.

spoons of stillness,
catching rain.
feast of awe,
I feel no shame.

lust of thrust,
Embrace fullness.
Pins "n" needles,
shoot it up.

threaded buttons.
tethered rush.
So capital,
for shard I love.

Submitted on 2008-09-26 09:01:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I didnt think this was about shooting up until the end. Let me know if I was wrong.

Spoons of stillness catching rain

I like that line a lot.
As for the rest of the piece I can't say much I don't have experience there. Done some things but never that.
| Posted on 2014-12-14 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]

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