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    dots Submission Name: lost in vintage dreamsdots

    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotslost in vintage dreamsdots

    your hands
    seem as playful
    as goldfish
    in a milk jug,
    but i'm only ever
    eating the walls again,
    privy to the noises
    that beggers make
    when running by.

    i have this stencil
    of jesus
    whiskeyed out
    on a park bench,
    spilling nickles
    like daydreams
    out onto the broken
    turin pavement.

    i've been looking
    for you.

    you flittered
    unspoken promises
    into my life
    with the air
    of orange peels
    & poetic silence
    about you.

    you were a new scene
    unto the shuttering
    street goddess.

    i watched
    as you tipped the ocean,
    into an open pocket
    of fuzz,
    eyes distant
    like lost
    in vintage dreams...

    i could almost
    give up reason
    for two more fingers
    of high-maintenance love

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      oh sweet seraph of staged literary bliss. i want to walk down the streets of your printed lines.

    reading lost in vintage dreams was like watching pearls and rose petals fall from satin lips.

    if i were to copy down all my favorite we'd wind up with the entire poem down here. such delicious visuals, such grace

    in shadow...
    | Posted on 2009-03-13 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]

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