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lost in vintage dreams


Author: blackbird
ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194 /328 /300
Words: 137
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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lost in vintage dreams




your hands
seem as playful
as goldfish
in a milk jug,
but i'm only ever
eating the walls again,
privy to the noises
that beggers make
when running by.

i have this stencil
of jesus
whiskeyed out
on a park bench,
spilling nickles
like daydreams
out onto the broken
turin pavement.

i've been looking
for you.

you flittered
unspoken promises
into my life
with the air
of orange peels
& poetic silence
about you.

you were a new scene
unto the shuttering
philosophy
street goddess.


i watched
as you tipped the ocean,
martini-like
into an open pocket
of fuzz,
eyes distant
like lost
in vintage dreams...

i could almost
give up reason
for two more fingers
of high-maintenance love




Submitted on 2008-09-26 13:02:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  oh sweet seraph of staged literary bliss. i want to walk down the streets of your printed lines.

reading lost in vintage dreams was like watching pearls and rose petals fall from satin lips.

if i were to copy down all my favorite we'd wind up with the entire poem down here. such delicious visuals, such grace

in shadow...
| Posted on 2009-03-13 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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