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    dots Submission Name: Dreamsdots
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    Author: Jingles
    ASL Info:    19.m.canada
    Elite Ratio:    2.08 - 18/60/36
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
    Total Views: 1046
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       This may not be my best write..
    Bt it's the most emotional tome.
    I broke down writing this, it's about a break up,wishing I still had her..And dreaming we were still togethor.


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    These tears of pain flow so free,
    No longer can I reside in me.
    This beatless heart fights silent screams,
    Once stitched so tight, now torn at seams.
    Why..please,why can't I exist in these dreams?
    These dreams of hope that forever remind me.
    Smiles so fake, laughs so lost,
    Living without you,at such a great cost.
    My sanctum,my world,in your kiss I found,
    Your laugh,your voice,my heart beat to the sound.
    But forever,gone,lost within time.
    As eternal regret steals a soul that was mine,
    Every morning I wake shattering once again,
    As reality grips those moments I'm still holding your hand.
    Time to sleep and prepare to be broken,
    As I whisper words to that night that I wish were still spoken.
    I close my eyes and you take me away,
    And I know in my dreams is where my heart shall lay.
    And I'll prey to the angels and cry to the skies,
    That someday and time my heart will once again rest in your mind.




    Submitted on 2008-09-27 00:30:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      so your my new favorite writer. i loved happy feet and i loved this one too. i can totally feel your emotion in this one and it brought tears to my eyes. im sorry you had to go through this. but damn that was good writing. another one to add to my favorites!!! well done.
    *joez*
    | Posted on 2009-09-12 00:00:00 | by joezwells | [ Reply to This ]
      pray*

    other than that i liked it, i felt it had a good flow for most of it, and it's raw emotional stuff.

    i can relate personally, powerful read.

    | Posted on 2008-09-29 00:00:00 | by The Wolverine | [ Reply to This ]


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