Clarity Through Chaos by Sheakhan

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Author:	Sheakhan
ASL Info:	22/M/FL
Elite Ratio:	5.66 - 167/183/82
Words:	85

Class/Type:	Prose/Misc
Total Views:	162
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	634

Description:
For once, I didn't bother spellchecking.

Beat me.

Also, I need advice here. Any suggestions?

Clarity Through Chaos dots

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Guitar strings snapped, and the cacophany of
nickel twanging was far more beautiful
than any sound I had coaxed out thus far.

Perhaps my musical voice is chaos?
Calamity bringing together a harmonious
band of brotherly disasters.

All falling together, like ash settles after
an eruption, or like debris settles after
a hurricane. I suppose that could be.

My only real instrument is an eclectic
blend of chance, happenstance,
confusion, belligerence, chaos, and fury.

Don't forget to dot the "i"'s.

Submitted on 2008-09-27 15:27:24 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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"Guitar strings snapped, and the cacophany of
nickel twanging was far more beautiful
than any sound I had coaxed out thus far."

This stanza tells me that the narrator, be that you or whomever, is probably new to the rugged world of guitar. The sudden twangs and snaps foreshadow a possibly violent and adventurous attitude, to which the gorgeous and repugnant extremes aren't shy to being uncovered.

He is apparently "coaxing" these out, wanting to experience them. Will he be happy with what he finds?

"Perhaps my musical voice is chaos?
Calamity bringing together a harmonious
band of brotherly disasters."

Trying to fond himself. I like how you can incorporate this dialog with oneself and at the same time making it so elaborate with carefully inserted phrases and vocabulary. Band of brotherly disasters is what really stood out to me. Personification is your friend.

"All falling together, like ash settles after
an eruption, or like debris settles after
a hurricane. I suppose that could be."

The narrator seems doubtful about this chaotic label. He still seems to want to pursue more; make himself an amalgamation of genres, though he isn't rejecting the thought that he may be chaotic. He's open.

Again, a good use of the self dialogue.

"My only real instrument is an eclectic
blend of chance, happenstance,
confusion, belligerence, chaos, and fury.

Don't forget to dot the "i"'s."

He comes to peace with himself, finally. He knows that he is too adventurous to tie himself down to one label. It gives a perfect wrap up to this musical adventure he's been exploring; a wasteland of sounds that rumble with his brainwaves, causing different emotional orgasms within his body, each pleasing him in a different way.

Why have one when you can have them all?

The only interpretation of the last line, though, is a bit hazy. It doesn't really fit in with the rest. Perhaps he means that he has to pull each off perfectly or he might end up venturing into the shadows, eh?

Overall, I give this a A-
| Posted on 2008-09-28 00:00:00 | by TheFoundFoe | [ Reply to This ]

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