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    dots Submission Name: That Dreaded Nightdots

    Author: NixLacus
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 5/11/24
    Words: 385
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Strange poem I wrote when I finished my English Exam 45 minutes early and had to sit in silence

    I have been told that it does not make so much sense when you read it in your head but does when you read it aloud.

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    dotsThat Dreaded Nightdots

    The lights are closing their heavy eyes
    The sun lay down it’s head
    The moon has come to watch
    I stand so still in the darkness
    I can not see around
    I can not hear a sound

    A slight woosh of air
    A draft
    A silent wind I felt brush against my hand
    If I close my eyes
    If I stand so still
    If I just pretend i’m dead
    Will you leave me O’beast?
    Will you take your bloody paws of death?
    Will you seek another prey?

    As I stand
    As I pray
    As I fear my life away
    You held out your hand
    You save my life
    You whisper in my ear
    “Run with me”
    “Run so far”
    “You will not die tonight”
    A voice so kind
    A voice so warm
    A voice I knew deep inside

    I ran
    I ran hand-in-hand
    I ran with this man
    “Who are you?”
    “Who are you?”
    “Who is my rescuer?”
    Waiting for an answer
    Waiting for a reply
    Waiting as I ran

    My waiting interrupted
    My eye caught sight
    My ears heard the dreaded roar
    A glimpse of silver fur
    A hint of silver stripes
    A wind so strong as it ran in front of us
    Inside I knew the end was near
    Inside I knew the time had come
    Inside however I still prayed

    He turned around
    He looked into my eyes
    He looked so familiar
    “I missed you”
    “I finally found you”
    “I must now die for you”
    Looking into his eyes
    Looking into his heart
    Looking as I remembered the last day we parted
    I remembered him now
    I remembered the times
    I remembered the love
    He brushed my hand with his
    He touched my cheek so delicately
    He laid his lips on mine

    His lips now turning cold
    His blood running on my hand
    His eyes so lifeless
    A smile on his face
    A last smile
    A last emotion
    Standing as his body fell
    Standing as I stared
    Standing as the black coal eyes stared at me
    A black wolf with a silver strip
    A monster in it’s eyes
    A blood thirsty creature deep inside

    Blood on it’s paws
    Blood on my hand
    Blood on his chest
    Now all three of us are connected

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      That ws an interesting twist you have here. I'm kinda a fan of wolvs so this one got to me. i even liked the structurer of the poem and the catchy story, very good.

    | Posted on 2008-10-08 00:00:00 | by faideddarkness | [ Reply to This ]

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