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    dots Submission Name: Awakeningdots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    18/M/Ohio State
    Elite Ratio:    5.99 - 174/192/133
    Words: 205
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 179
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    dotsAwakeningdots
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    You, like me, impersonate the sins of your wildest dreams every morning when you crawl out of bed and try so desperately to hold on to the haze through which you view the world.

    One step at a time, clarity pokes through the blinds like rays of somber sunshine.

    It glints and blinds you mid-stride… and you stumble on your way to the bathroom to brush your teeth and start your day.

    … as you splash your face with cold water… the last remnants of your fantasy world wash away, and you realize that once again you wish only to return again to the dreamscapes that serve as your nocturnal resting place.

    So… reluctantly, you dress and slip on your shoes.
    …but there are ways to turn a blind eye to even the most blatant of truths.

    Stopping only to grab the small bowl you keep neatly by the door, so that with lighter in hand you can fight the obvious, and go about your dreaming.

    Sunshine peeks through a cracked door, and you turn the deadlock from the outside, locking up.

    And like me, in the end, you resign to face the day.




    Submitted on 2008-09-28 16:55:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      You are unresponsive on Chatango so I guess I'll just write out a formal comment. This was very well written, as is most of your stuff. I didn't like the use of ellipses in the middle, specially since you use extended sentences already. It just drags it on unnecessarily.
    …but there are ways to turn a blind eye to even the most blatant of truths.
    This line sounded slightly off too. Nevertheless, I like your style, James.
    | Posted on 2008-11-24 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]



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