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    dots Submission Name: Whisperdots
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    Author: beatthedrum
    ASL Info:    55- F - Southern CA USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 881/810/122
    Words: 30
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    For the butterfly to emerge
    a caterpillar must surrender

    For the cherries to come
    blossoms drop and wither

    Listen to their lessons
    lean into the whisper




    Submitted on 2008-09-28 19:08:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      To me, this is a classic. This is something that gives a lesson in a beautiful wrapper. I enjoyed this and will certainly be back to read more from you!
    | Posted on 2009-02-11 00:00:00 | by JustAnotherMe | [ Reply to This ]
      i'm gonna start with a hmmm... as well. only because i am sitting here reading this and wondering; does the caterpillar actually surrender? i mean, he doesn't die, right? doesn't he just change? i guess i'm just having a hard time with the idea of a caterpillar submitting itself to the act of becoming something as lovely as a butterfly...

    still this has a nice quiet sound. i love the last line.
    lean into the whisper
    | Posted on 2008-10-14 00:00:00 | by ever | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmmm.. I guess sometimes less is more. This poem is about the "circle of life". I actually really like it. Short as it is, it gets the point across. You use the right words to convey the idea. Very good.
    | Posted on 2008-09-29 00:00:00 | by Silver20G | [ Reply to This ]


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