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    dots Submission Name: NIGHT ARTISTdots
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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Serious
    Total Views: 547
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 617



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       THIS IS A REPOST IM TRYING TO REWORK ANY HELP WOULD BE APPRI....


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    dotsNIGHT ARTISTdots
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    Tonight you are my shelter.
    You are every rhythm ,ever song.
    It can last forever or just an hour.
    Doesnt matter not to me, not tonight .
    I will let you cover me, hide me in your light.
    I only wished youd let me finish .
    The drink.
    The evenings painting.
    I wish you hadnt turned the light on .
    Everything is more beautiful in the dark.
    So ok you found me here
    Seems pathetic I am sure.
    Think whatever you like tonight.
    In your arms the anger leaves for a moment .
    I am someones something.
    There is peace in that .




    Submitted on 2008-09-29 11:58:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the way that this poem reminds me that we are all imperfect and lead imperfect lives, but still find much pleasure and enjoyment from many things.

    Nice write, lovely lady!
    | Posted on 2008-09-30 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      My love is an Artist makes me think of the way we feel after make-up sex. Laying there fulfilled BUT STILL ANGRY. Safe but insecure. It set me on fire for a minute.
    | Posted on 2008-09-29 00:00:00 | by bigohhh1 | [ Reply to This ]


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