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    dots Submission Name: The Puppet: Part 10 - Instructin Manualdots
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    ASL Info:    18/M/That one place
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    dotsThe Puppet: Part 10 - Instructin Manualdots
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    "Follow me my puppet. I will control your mind, and your bones. You and I will be we. Forget about all you love, all those who care, those nights lyeing in bed with a loved one, none of that means anything. You have failed all whom you love, all you've helped, it was in vein. My pets will sculpt you to fit my image, and then, your child."
    "Stay away from him you bastard!" I screamed.
    "Anger, the first step. We are getting closer."
    I heard a noise, ever so familiar. A CAB HORN!
    I awoke at the sight of a cab screatching to a halt inches from my head. I had awoken in front of the hospital. I rushed inside to find Sam. What had just happened should have seemed weird, but with the way things have been going, nothing suprised me. The doctor met me at the door of her room. He did not look up, only down, as he exited to the left. I walked in and seen Sam laying there. I walked up and placed my hand on her forehead, as she looked up a tear rolled down her eye.
    "We lost our little girl. The injuries were to extensive, she couldn't make it." She said as she cried.
    "What did you do?" I asked in my head.
    "It was a girl. Sorry for your loss, but I need a MALE offspring, so, I cancelled that order." He said calmly.
    I could do nothing but cry as I held Sam closer to me than I had ever before.
    "I'm so sorry, so, so sorry." She said over and over in a broken voice.
    I remained silent excluding the whimpers and crying.
    "Sorrow, the second step in becoming what I need. Three left." He said.




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      AH! where's the rest? lol it's going great so far! :) keep writing :)
    | Posted on 2008-10-03 00:00:00 | by Kaygrl | [ Reply to This ]


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