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    dots Submission Name: flammabledots
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    Author: The Wolverine
    ASL Info:    23/M/MA
    Elite Ratio:    4.51 - 74/137/91
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 791
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    dotsflammabledots
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    you stare into my eyes
    as your words pour over me like gasoline
    and you smile as you turn
    tossing a match and watching things....


    well i caught
    all the things you said
    every single syllables is branded in my head
    while i burn
    you walk away
    (while i burn)
    i say

    well im sorry
    but it's not ending this way
    kept my cool in the inferno
    and i know that you don't want to go
    so please stay


    yeah im sorry
    as we both embrace
    your face is alight and
    now you're aflame
    and we know we're both to blame
    (i know you feel the same)

    so let's burn bright and burn fast,
    let's burn out but make this fire last

    we'll burn so bright, tonight
    forget all of the scars
    they're gonna see us from the stars
    and look at us with envy

    let's burn bright, and burn slow, do things right this time and burn out when we want to go




    Submitted on 2008-09-29 17:28:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This was a very well written song. As i was reading i could kind of imagine the ryhthem and see someone on stage just them and a guitar remembering great love that was or still is continuing to burn brightly. i enjoyed this very much.

    Gena
    | Posted on 2008-11-26 00:00:00 | by luvy | [ Reply to This ]
      This was written very well. It flowed nicely. I do wish I knew what knid of mucis went to it. I can relate to this very closely. Only with a more pessimistic attitude. Very nice. Keep up the great work, and I'll keep reading

    »Haely«
    | Posted on 2008-09-30 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]


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