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    dots Submission Name: Likewise, Lovedots
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    Author: Jimi James
    ASL Info:    24/m/somehwere
    Elite Ratio:    6.16 - 90/78/41
    Words: 50
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 664
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    Description:
       failed in writing a sonnet.
    couldnt change it.
    what?


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    dotsLikewise, Lovedots
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    On a cold tuesday evening,
    my good vision-blurring friend;
    how he's swarming a fine story.
    Musing. Keeps me warm.

    You flow oh time
    like the money, I'd know that.
    My friend, he's coming back.

    On a cold wednesday evening
    I can hear it. Feeling. Frost.
    "Forlorn", barefaced.




    Submitted on 2008-09-29 18:26:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really do not know what to think of this poem....It's all very abstract . There but not really there just when I think I understand I am left puzzled. Is your friend the frost??? I do not understand but in a way I like it. I like poetry that makes you think and this piece definably makes me think.....
    | Posted on 2008-10-28 00:00:00 | by aNNmARIE | [ Reply to This ]


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