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    dots Submission Name: Never as much as your drinksdots
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    Author: HimeManko
    ASL Info:    19/F/PA
    Elite Ratio:    0.44 - 6/3/16
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 600
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 892



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       yeah bad subject to talk about


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    dotsNever as much as your drinksdots
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    I remember the days you'd lie in bed and never leave
    Blond tresses lay like a fan around your face
    I'd always smile your way, your smile never returned
    I always said back then when you smile it was like a shining star
    We'd rarely talk, do tears and sobs count?
    I'd take your hand in mine sitting at your bed side
    and tell you how beautiful you were
    but it only brought on more tears, so one day I just stopped
    I'd turn to leave, a weak and sad young woman I was
    then look back once as I leaned against your door frame
    "I love you" I'd whisper
    "I love you too" You'd softly reply
    A small sigh and my head bowed down, a few tears slipping
    "But never as much as your drinks?"
    And you never did answer
    I always knew the truth




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