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    Author: NixLacus
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 5/11/24
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 566
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 528



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       God knows why I wrote it but I did so here it is to share

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    Once again I dive in deep
    Once again I blindly thought you might be different
    I knew straight away of your lies
    Knew everything within a few days
    Yet I couldn't bare to say anything
    Couldn't bare to listen to your voice's disappointing tone
    Just like always I have messed up again
    Like I always seem to do
    Everyday it hurts more because I know you're lying
    Everyday it eats away at me inside
    I just can't stand to tell you how I feel




    Submitted on 2008-09-30 09:30:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I under stand why itís hard to make such a decision, and with a heart that some of us carry, its hard to be the person that has to cause the pain. A mess none of us should have to go through. It hurts to say something but sometimes it must be done.


    Faid
    | Posted on 2008-10-13 00:00:00 | by faideddarkness | [ Reply to This ]
      On this one, I am confussed, because you talk about being sad, over some one lying to you, but than you mentioned being sad over what you did. So did you do somthing to make some one lie? Eitherway, its still good. It makes clearly the emotion of a hurt betrayed person, who doesn't know how to tell the betrayer, that you know he is lying. (Wait, I just got it, on what its about). Its good. And like always, it flows smoothly


    Grimm Reaper
    | Posted on 2008-10-11 00:00:00 | by grimmreaper | [ Reply to This ]


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