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    dots Submission Name: Watery Thoughtsdots
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    Author: NixLacus
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 5/11/24
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Average Vote:    4.5000
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    dotsWatery Thoughtsdots
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    I think back and remember
    Remembering my kisses slowly down his neck
    His gentle nibbling on my ear
    As he whispers the words I wished to hear
    His touch so gentle
    Feathers delicatly brush over my rosey cheeks
    A finger outlines the rubies that are my lips
    Then a gentle bite upon my lip
    Awakes me from my slumber

    As watery memories escape from their pools
    As I drown within my watery thoughts
    I scream inside to the thump of my heart
    Thoughts of why and wonder of how
    They take me away
    As I just lay there in my bed of pain
    Bed of memories, pain, happiness and life
    To many thoughts lay within my head
    As well as within this bed
    I can not bare to leave
    Could never bare to see
    See the monster I've become
    The train wreck he made me
    Person she destroyed




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      This peom clearly describes a crushed person, ruined by a bad relashionship. Thats why I like your poems, cause your really good at taking a event, and desccribing the pain the person feels. Most likely and sadly, you have lived this events, but at least you turned them into somthing good, such as this poem.. Keep writing.


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    | Posted on 2008-10-11 00:00:00 | by grimmreaper | [ Reply to This ]


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