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    dots Submission Name: Who Art Thou In Heavendots

    Author: L.L.COLLINS
    ASL Info:    25-ORLANDO, FL
    Elite Ratio:    4.57 - 172/147/36
    Words: 220
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsWho Art Thou In Heavendots

    Who art thou in heaven,
    high and mighty home above thee,
    water and sun to the leaf,
    birthing both peace and beast.
    Let there be love
    in the windy breeze,
    come tumbling and swaying
    and blowing on me.
    Encrusted in the crevices
    of it's graceful gust,
    travel this way a heart,
    a heart can trust.
    Arms perfectly made
    to web and weave,
    Strong enough to hold,
    gentle enough to keep.

    Who art thou in heaven,
    watching down on us beneath,
    life to the un-breathing sea,
    colors of the butterfly wing.
    Let there be love
    descending within the rains,
    come pouring atop the shatterings,
    until just the pure remains.
    Yonder the dreadful bygones
    with an unclothed nakedness
    bathed in the honest rains,
    unchain this resentfulness.
    Allow it to immerse
    and imbue into the skins,
    if there is a lamb within,
    leave me to drench.

    Who art thou in heaven,
    with ears to every bending knee,
    air beneath the greatest leap,
    earth beneath the deepest deep.
    Let there be love
    in the grass and the trees
    come founding, grounding,
    surrounding me.
    In bites of fruits from your apple tree
    give chance to impossibility,
    with love for the unloved,
    grab hands and take lead
    From valley low
    to mountain peak.

    Submitted on 2008-09-30 10:12:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm sort of speachless...I guess I'll just say it...WOW! Honestly and full heartedly friggin" beautifully done! BRAVO!!!!
    Beautiful, yet Corrupted
    | Posted on 2008-10-02 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]

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