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    Author: BloodtornAngel
    ASL Info:    21/F/inyour wildest dream
    Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 21/28/43
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
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    I can feel your presence next to me
    and it hurts that i can't be
    the one you look to and say thats her
    when i was always so sure
    that things would end up right
    and we'd be a beautiful sight

    I copy quotes and write you name
    your in all my games
    you never knew
    it was all for you
    till that night so true
    when i said things I didn't believe
    when you knew I tried to deieve
    I said you'd never hurt
    this fragile heart
    but in truth I know
    no one could but you

    You wonder what might have become
    if I'd never become anyone
    what would happen
    what would it be then
    I'd have never hurt you
    can't you see
    thats what life would be
    if you didn't have to deal with me




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