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    dots Submission Name: Lovely trapsdots
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    Author: BloodtornAngel
    ASL Info:    21/F/inyour wildest dream
    Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 21/28/43
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 962
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 443



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    dotsLovely trapsdots
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    The rage of a child
    the pain of something more
    all his emotions astir
    like a whirlwind of rain
    so much love
    so much hate
    hist fist clenched in rage
    his eyes close to tears
    broken hearted
    caught in a lovely trap
    designed for anyone but him
    as he walks away
    I feel like crap
    for the lives I've had to take
    for the souls I've had to break




    Submitted on 2008-09-30 13:54:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I really enjoyed this, there are so many different things you can apply this to in life. Alot of people should be able to relate to this. I'm not sure if that was what you were going for or not, but you should know your writing will help many cope in the years to come. You've done well with this. So simple yet deep all the same! Good Job!
    Beautiful, yet Corrupted
    Dominique
    | Posted on 2008-10-02 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]


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